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Post by Chelle on Oct 2, 2003 1:26:19 GMT -5
heya i started writting a fan fics the other night and i thought i would share it tell mewot ya think?
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- FlashBack -
" Get out of the ways " the man had shouted " No way nothing comes in between me and my daughter " My mother had shouted " Silly women i want the child not you move or ill shoot " he shouted at my mother " No way : My mother had screamed back " Fine " The maan shouted the last time BANG he shoot my mother she has fallen to the ground as the gunman ran off. " Mum " i scream as i run over to her " Common mum wake up i need you " i say as i pull my phone out of my poket to ring the ambulence. As i hang up i take my jumper off and try to stop the bleeding. there is no use it wont stop. After what seems like eternity the ambulence arrives and we get rushed to hospital. We finally reach reach the hospital and they rush My mother to emergency. A few hours have passed when the doctor finally comes out " Sorry miss richings but your mother has passed away. He tells me. i fall to the ground i think im going to be sick so i run to the toilet
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Post by ~!i!*HaWaiiaNguRL*!i!~ on Oct 2, 2003 4:24:23 GMT -5
WOW thats a REALLY REEALLY good start! i cant wait to hear the next part!!
XOXO Christi
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Post by Chelle on Oct 2, 2003 5:31:01 GMT -5
here is the second part to the story
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" Alissia Richings please pay attention " Mrs williams shouted. She is my teacher for singing, dancing and acting. At the moment we were practising a play for the end of the year. As always i scored the main roll the innocent singer and dancer trying to make it big. Only if they knew the truth. We were practising the last scene for the first time. It was to much to handle only 3 weeks ago she passed and already pressured into this. a scene where a person dies.I couldnt take much more i had to get out of there so i did i run as fast as i can. i didnt no exactly no where i was going but i had to get out and away. after a good 5 minute run i somehow ended up down at the peer. its a local hangout for all teenages. " oh great rain" i say to myself but i sit on the peer anyways. i was in my own little world remembering the good times with my mum. i was so out of it i dint realise 2 girls were sitting next to me with an umbrella. i start to get up " hey wait up are u ok? " the first girl asked. She had blonde hair and was very pretty she kinda reminds me of myself with the short blonde hair. She looks very familiar. " im fine " i say sitting back down " not ur not or else u would not be out in the rain crying " the other girl said. she had dark curly hair and was also very pretty. " if only i was like these girls they look perfect nothing wrong with them" i think to myself. " I cant really talk bout it, it is very painful " i say almost in tears again. we sit there in silence for awhile
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Post by x0 jazzeh on Oct 2, 2003 5:32:01 GMT -5
My god, I'm nearly crying!
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Post by Chelle on Oct 2, 2003 5:48:56 GMT -5
please dont cry would u like me to continue
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Post by sami on Oct 2, 2003 8:13:26 GMT -5
this is really sad!
please continue!
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Post by Chelle on Oct 2, 2003 19:02:11 GMT -5
" I cant believe she is really gone " Alissia says almost in a whisper. " who is gone " The first girl asked " my mother" alissia stutters " What happened " The second girl asked " she died 3 weeks ago, i was held up in a shop and the man was going to shott me but my mother stood in the way and he shoot her, she died a few hours later in the hospital" Alissia explains " oh im so sorry , if " the first girl started but i cut her off " its ok u didnt no " Ali said i smmile weakly. while the teo girls smile sympothetically " Oh by the way im hannah and this is stacey " hannah said smiling. " Hi im Alissia " She introduces herself. the rain had stopped but the wind was blowing real fast " Would u like to come back to our friends place and dry off." Stacey asked " Nah im fine gotta be off soon " i say getting up. then the 3 girls heard 2 peolpe running towards them.
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Post by sami on Oct 3, 2003 3:33:20 GMT -5
this is really sad. more please chelle!
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Post by Chelle on Oct 3, 2003 5:27:23 GMT -5
i gotta go out ill post more tomorrow
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Post by Dazerock on Oct 4, 2003 14:00:40 GMT -5
omg...thats so sad.... [img src="http://smilies.networkessence.net/s/otn/sad/mecry.gif["]
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Post by Chelle on Oct 6, 2003 2:53:16 GMT -5
" hannah stacey here u are " 2 boys said coming up to them. " yeah we were walking when we came across alissia" Hannah said cuddling up to one of the boys. " dont come near me girl ur wet and cold" the boy said "Give the poor girl her jacket she is gunna freeze to death" the other boys yelled handing stacey her jacket. " oh yeah alissia this is aaron and calvin, calvin and aaron alissia. " Hannah said whilst aaron held her around the waist. " hi " aaron said shaking her hand and calvin did the same.
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Post by lil_ms_sneeky on Oct 6, 2003 3:41:03 GMT -5
hey ur fic is great! please update asap! ;D
love alitha xoxox
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Post by Mernie on Oct 8, 2003 6:50:07 GMT -5
yeah it's great!plz update soon
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Post by [___..:~*Sc8bAbE*~:..___] on Oct 9, 2003 1:38:53 GMT -5
yeah thats well good!!!!! post more please im crying
lol
lotsa luv
em xoxo
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Post by Chelle on Oct 10, 2003 7:22:14 GMT -5
" im gunna get going now" alissia told the other 4. " maybe ill see ya around" " yeah see ya " calvin and aaron said "bye" alissia said walking off. "alissia" hannah yelled running up to her as stacey. " alissia please take care" hannah said whilst cuddling her. " and dont do anything i wouldnt do" stacey also said while cuddling alissia. stacey laughed to herself as she new her options were wide open. " i will thanks guys." Alissia said turning around and walking off. hannah and stacey walked back to aaron and calvin. " so wot was that about?" aaron asked. " dont worry thats one messed up girl" stacey said walking off as the others followed. " ok but she is kinda hot" calvin said " calvin " the other 3 shouted
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